Sunday, July 08, 2012

timeless

Wordle#64-Sunday Whirl-07-08-2012
Poetic Bloomings Uncertainty-Prompt #63  
timeless by Teri H Hoover



For a while eternity sat in the corner
with the sting of time.

a day?
a month?
a year?


the timeless
always blurs the line.


idly the clock ticks loudly
above the kitchen sink,

and obliging housewives
collect the rinds of lemons.

eternity shifts and wanders
and slips into a drawer. 

bitterly, the zest of life lays on the kitchen
counter and spurns the kitchen clock.

in vein it falls upon dull cutlery
while subtracting dinner guests
right there on the dining room table.

yet in all the clutter
the thin line of ignorance
creates just enough room for hope.

open the door
uncurl the ball of moments
and corners fall away. 

the scent of lemons linger
and no one
hears the clock.



This weeks words from the Sunday Whirl:  
ignorant, spurn, eternity, drawers, balls, year, rind, sting, months, housewives, subtracting, fall


Notes: Just a bit of writing from a fuzzy mind. Recovery from surgery has simoltaneously contracted and expanded time. The nature of time versus timelessness came to mind as I wrote this at  4AM.









43 comments:

  1. Oh what a dull life this housewife leads. Very vivid pictures all through this.
    'The zest of life lays on the kitchen counter' Awww
    Great wordle :)

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    1. I find it interesting how many wordles ended up as the laments of "housewives". Thanks for stopping by.

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  2. I do think one does a lot of contemplation of time sometimes in one's life....such as the 'after surgery' you mentioned. I do think we need to live on mindfully, one day at a time, and get to that place where we do not hear the ticking of the clock and enjoy the scent of lemons along the way.

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    1. Mary, I love lemons. I need to have my husband pick some up this afternoon.

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  3. Love it Teri!! Annette http://hoofprintsinmygarden.wordpress.com/2012/07/07/the-sting-of-eternity/

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    1. Why thank you Annette... sounds like both our housewives could use a day off.

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  4. The lemon imagery in this poem is outstanding. The senses are awakened by the olfactory and the color! The mind is twitched with the irony. The ending is superb.

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    1. Nan, thanks for such a full comment. I appreciate put some thought into giving a glimmer of hope at the end -thanks for noting this.

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  5. How far you traveled and never left the kitchen with its scent of lemon. Beautiful work and I love how it mirrors most thought patterns at 4am, yet packs a deep and abiding message.

    Elizabeth

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    1. Elizabeth-Your comment carries me even further. Thank you.

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  6. Your topic is a favourite of mine and your state of mind was probably perfect for considering it. Hope all went well and that you are comfortably ensconced at home.

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    1. Margo-Ensconced and pretty comfortable. I am not a patient, patient...I just came inside from pulling weeds in my PJ's and sling. I am a sight I am sure!

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  7. So many different things tickling the senses in this lovely poem. Very well done.

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    1. Thank you Misky- the kitchen is alive at 4AM... who knew?

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  8. "Tickling the senses," indeed. Bravo!

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  9. I do wonder if you were visiting me...as the other day I did decide to make fresh lemonade. But that is where the similarity ends...While the sent lingers. The kitchen clock continuously ticking...I like how the corners fall away. Hope you are recovering - there will be those mornings that sleep is elusive as you've napped during the day. What a great use of time though to wordle words :)

    Visit when your able:
    http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/07/sw-64-wordle-diamond-in-rough.html

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    1. I am sporadic in my visiting for a bit longer. This one armed thing is quite annoying. Thankfully nice people like you have made my day brighter. Thanks for visiting Jules!

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  10. Oh this is warm and fuzzy. It made me feel good, and it was a gradual warming. The ending is like an opening. Brava, Teri!!

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    1. Brenda- I am glad you saw beyond the gloomy beginnings, I always like when I can bring a piece back towards the center.

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  11. A rewarding read - poignant with time, truth and a rind of hope!

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    1. I love that... " a rind of hope"!

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  12. Wonderful piece. Your inventiveness and imagination never ceases to amaze me. The last stanza rounds it off beautifully.

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    1. Libby- your words are so encouraging- would you mind coming to sit beside me as I write?

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  13. I like the image of eternity sitting there in the corner, and then wandering about the kitchen. Also very beautiful: "bitterly, the zest of life lays on the kitchen counter and spurns the kitchen clock". Great poem Teri! And 4 am definitely feels timeless....

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    1. Inger- So very nice to see you! I did have a lot of fun with giving eternity a bit of character.

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  14. Oh dear, I did stop by here earlier to say how wonderful it was to see you over at Poetic Bloomings but as so often happens with my entries, I cut myself off ... so - once more, it's great to read your work again Teri - hope to see you around more ... I'm out of the country at the moment but am trying to get on-line with some regularity so will watch for you. I like what you've done here blending to the two prompts - it worked well ... nice.

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    1. Sharon-These computers- such a blessings and a pain in the butt! I hope to find a bit more time for PB... I do love Walt and Marie Elena's prompts- and they are so darn nice!Thanks for your nice comment.

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  15. Love the imagery in this, Teri. I hope you are recovering well.

    Pamela

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    1. Pamela - that means a lot coming from you. I anticipate your writing because of all the great imagery you always create!

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  16. Teri, I loved this piece when I first read it from the link at Poetic Bloomings. Marie and I are honored to have you join our garden walk with such an image laden bit of worded wonder. Very nice.

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    1. Walt- As I said before I always read your Prompts and love them. Here's to using them to write more. Thanks for stopping by.

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  17. Your wordling skill leaves me breathless: you made such meaningful poetry from the motley collection of words. There are times, particularly during illness, when every minute seems an eternity.

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    1. Viv-I am with you...these words seem to take me for a ride every week. I thank you for your visit and comment.

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  18. YAY! I was able to comment, right here on your page!!! So glad to see you have been writing. That's a good sign. Hope your recovery is going well!

    Your poem is brilliant, Teri! Nothing fuzzy about this piece. I especially liked your opening lines:
    "For a while eternity sat in the corner
    with the sting of time."

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    1. Marianne-The internet is a strange and mysterious place...so glad it worked today!Recovery is steady, but slow. Writing and photographing keep me sane.Even though I wrote this at 4AM,I really did enjoy the imagery that emerged from the dark.

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  19. Keep writing at 4:00 AM. This poem is fabulous. `bitterly the zest of life lays on the kitchen counter' This tells the tale of the poem for me.

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  20. Teri, I cannot tell you what a pleasure to find your blog, and all because you dropped by mine for a visit (I think because of this week's Sunday Whirl). We have such an overwhelming - a God-thing for certain - amount of things in common, it takes my breath away. If you are interested, I will send you links to some of my posts that point out how closely we are related spiritually. I too am a lover of photography, although a newbie and a definite amateur, I developed a passion for it, when the loss of 90% of the use of my right hand led me to seek another way of artistic expression, as I can no longer play the piano, which was dear to my heart. How the camera came into my life is an amazing story of how God works - so much so that my camera is referred to, quite rightly - as "God's camera."

    I invite you to visit not only my writer's blog - eclectic mix of many things, not the least of which is poetry, and my new photography blog, called "Reflected Glory - My Adventures in Photography," located at: http://myphotoreflections.wordpress.com I ask you to please stop by that blog in particular, because I am hungry for comments from true photographers like yourself. I want to get better at what I do, and suggestions for ways to improve are always very welcome, and I have very thick skin! Only mean-spirited comments are offensive. Constructive criticism is never offensive to me!

    I am the "Paula" who put together this week's Wordle (#64). When I created it, i had no idea where it would lead me, so I was surprised at my own result. Your is beautiful, and very well done. A seamless use of the words - congratulations!

    I would like very much to "converse" with you. Rather than take up space here, if you are so inclined, please e-mail me at: calhounpaula@ymail.com I live in the Smoky Mountains of western NC, in Waynesville, at present. My husband and I are retired, and as it is a favorite area of my Hub's life since his childhood, we made the decision to retire here. We love it. We have lived in SW Virginia as well, so we are familiar with the area in which you live. You are not too terribly far from us. This area is a wonderful place for photography lovers. There is something that catches ones eye almost every time you look or turn around! You are welcome to come and see.

    I do hope and pray that your shoulder is healing well, and that the worst of the pain is over with and that your therapy can begin and then end with a wonderful, new, pain-free and useful arm! Other than "The Sunday Whirl," I notice that you use many different challenges and prompt sites. Would you please tell me the ones you use - especially photography ones, but poetry sites are also always of interest - by sending me the links? I do hope that you will contact me so that we can begin what I believe will be a very interesting e-conversation. In the meantime, I have become a follower, and I guarantee you that I will be back often to enjoy the beauty of your work!

    I wish you enough. . .
    Paula

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    1. Paula - I will be in touch very soon! It is always a welcome blessing to find kindred souls. AND indeed you are not very far away. Heading over to your blogs now.xo teri

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  21. I think your poem is marvelous. I like how you used the word 'subtracting'. It's one of the cooler words this week, don't you think?

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    1. Thank you Cheryl-these words are always great for giving my mind "dots" to connect.Subtracting was a good focus word for me this week. Cool indeed.

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  22. Wow!! I see you're not lacking comments for this mysteriously crafted poem!! I love all that is said with out saying that scent of lemon!! Well done Teri and nice combo!!

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  23. I like the way the lemon and clock run through this poem. I love how you used "zest of life". Eternity and specificity meeting.

    Richard

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