Sunday, June 17, 2012

Unchecked


Wordle#61-Sunday Whirl-06-17-2012 
Unchecked  by Teri H Hoover


Latch the chest to
spare the heart.                                                                        

Strike a pose to 
blend the currents.

Refrain from racket to
draft the temper.

Trace the string to
crack the code. 

Cracked codes- check
Traced strings- check
Drafted tempers-check
Refrained rackets- check
Blended currents- check
Poses struck-check

The spared heart...

living in the latched chest-

is not living at all.








I seem to be whirling around heart work this week. Whirling is such a good word. Have a wonderful Sunday everyone.

The words for the Sunday Whirl are: blend, latch, chest, current, draft, string,crack, spare, temper, refrain, racket, trace, strike


26 comments:

  1. Powerful and effective way to present the poem... thought-provoking ending.

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    1. Laurie- Thank you for your concise and thoughtful comment. So many have mentioned my form/presentation this week. I will have to go back and consider it.

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  2. I like the format that you used to write this poem. Sometimes when all is 'checked' life is not what we hoped.

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    1. Mary- the format took on a list form, that helped me find the check list bit at the end. And what we have checked off sometimes becomes our stumbling blocks.

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  3. Ican only agree with Laurie and Mary, a wonderfully worked poem.

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  4. I also love the way you used the form for this.
    Check!
    You're so right, living that way is not living or will it ever find love or give love at all. Check. :)
    A great wordle!

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    1. DDT- This form evolved to suit the poem... I am beginning to think it was a good match! Thank- you.

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  5. Beautiful combination of ideas and thoughts and a grand effective message in the end Teri Great work here.

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    1. Thank-you Anjum- I have been listening to what my heart is saying... but it has been a bit muffled. It is becoming a bit clearer.

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  6. sometime the latch on our chests needs to open, at other times we need that protection.....lovely poetry and great use of wordles

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    1. Hello Joanne- I could not agree with you more. I just have a bit of trouble with that. SO very nice to meet you.

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  7. Hah! I love the way you are branching and playing and developing forms. This is a lovely, little structure and suits its content, which is all any poet can ask!
    xm

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    1. Margo- I came back to my comments quite late. I see that 5 or so people have mentioned form. And you... you know how I feel about form. I am trying to not let it fluster me. It was simple... the poem felt like a list... it came out like a list. I did not see that until today. Kind of like a heart that avoids life, a writer who avoids form will eventually succumb. (writer??)

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  8. This is great, Teri. I see pieces of a photo shoot, but something much deeper, too. I love the ending, and the all too human image of latched chest.

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    1. Brenda- Now that is a most lovely metaphor. I will take that thought to bed with me tonight

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  9. If my friend you had any doubts about your writing skills - dash them away! If you have yet to declare yourself such I do so now...You are a Poet!
    Friend - check
    Wife - check
    Mother - check
    Photographer - check
    Poet - check!

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    1. Jules- I love when you return with a poem in your comments. You too kind, thank you my Friend!

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  10. I too love this form, Teri. It lends itself well to the words.

    Pamela

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    1. Pamela - as I told Margo, I did not see the form until after everyone's comments. I appreciate the insight and agree whole-heartedly.

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  11. Great use of the wordle. The form suits it perfectly.

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    1. Thanks Annette- It was a fun collection of words, that fit perfectly into some of my musings this week. And as I have noted in my replies the form evolved unbeknownst to me.

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  12. Tight concise use of the words to format deep wisdom. Love what happens when we let go and simply follow where the words lead us. The surprises they give us are the gift and reward we receive for listening to the voice of our soul. Excellent stuff,

    Elizabeth

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  13. I love the idea of a list poem and the strength repetition adds. Your last stanza is deep and thoughtful; ties it all together and provides a perfect ending.
    The spared heart...
    living in the latched chest-
    is not living at all.
    Gorgeous!

    I wrote my first List Poem as a response to a prompt for NaPoWriMo in 2011. I love the form and will try to remember to use it soon.

    Have a great week!
    Best,
    Marianne

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  14. Love that ending. It points out the futility - or the emptiness - when one tries to "spare" the heart. It's "not living at all."

    Richard

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