Sunday, April 29, 2012

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 Wordle#54-Sunday Whirl-04-28-2012
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eyes closed 
squander the view 
on the edge of the sea
green pewter waves,  crash over a beating heart.
flocks of intractable thoughts, 
flow, tangle and tether.

a lane without love

shifting sand, cool, salt water.
opening eyes and heart-
a small alley 
and an ocean of love.   

 


The words: Thank-you Brenda for sharing Mariann's words from *elle ecrit* 
alley, sea, eyes,squander, accommodate, flocks, green,follow, pewter, beating, intractable

17 comments:

  1. I love the green pewter waves. A moving poem that I shall read again.

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  2. Oh my goodness, we certainly took the words in a similar direction! I always write my own Wordle before I read others', and I find it SO interesting when people write similar images... It is just as interesting as all the variation we sometimes find with our fellow writers. Well done! ;-) You used a few words I was't able to incorporate.

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    1. Nan-Most times I finish writing before I look at what others have written. My brain becomes a muddled mess, if I read first. Hmmm but it could be I am easily distracted. It was nice to head down to the seaside for this wordle- thanks for stopping by.

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  3. I can feel the speaker's emotions, Teri. For me, that is the hardest part of writing, the speaker's tone. Those wretched 'intractable thoughts'. I am plagued. Must open my eyes more.

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  4. ...green pewter waves crash over a beating heart... lovely, Teri

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  5. Gorgeous writing, Teri! "Green pewter waves, crash over a beating heart" and "intractable thoughts, flow, tangle and tether" are brilliant!

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    1. Marianne- Thanks for stopping by with your comments. And thank you for this weeks words. xo teri

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  6. I love flow, tangle, and tether. Your poetry is visual, and speaks on a soul level. Excellent write, Teri.

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  7. "intractable thoughts,
    flow, tangle and tether."
    I really like that, Teri. Nicely woven all round.

    Pamela

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  8. love the transition from closed to open eyes, from squander to love.

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    1. Thank you Mark- I love the clarity of your comment.

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  9. OH DEAR - I just realized I have forgotten a word! But here you go...with flocks of wordle friends I always find something new to read and write. Once again thanks for stopping by!

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    1. and there I fixed it!

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  10. "...a small alley..." just a squint of an open eye, to slowly open the avenue to a rewarding love of life. Nicely wordled - My elfje's take up my brevity powers - my Wordle was another 'story' of sorts:
    http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/04/lackluster-lackey-sunday-whirl-wordle.html

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  11. Teri, it's beautiful. I love (thought it makes me sad) "a lane without love". And that contrast in the last two lines - wonderful!

    Richard

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  12. Lovely and hopeful. That shifting and opening up. Nice.

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