Sunday, February 26, 2012

Relief



Entranced by the overload of dense directions,
cumbersome as wet cement.
Reluctant stray answers,
murmur and pelt the senses.
I light a match and watch the map go up in smoke.



Notes- The words came though from Brenda, last night before I went to bed.  I let the stew and simmer while I slept. At breakfast while drinking my tea the words wrote them self  out. 

 The words were-
entranced,dense,cumbersome,cement,
reluctant,stray,answer,murmur,pelt,
senses,map,smoke,


18 comments:

  1. Oh Teri, this is inspired! The words are all there, but it reads like it wrote itself. The final line is my favorite. Bravo!

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    1. Brenda - I went back to minimal words again this week. I am away on vacation and did not have time to write anything more. Thanks for the great words and stopping by!

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  2. I like your speaker's reaction to the four lines of thinking that go before. The action is wonderfully liberating [even if maplessness is a scary thing].

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    1. "Maplessness"

      I love it!! I had to read it three times.. I first read Maple-ness...I thought what does she mean? Talking about maples? I am now laughing and ready for the rest of my mapless day. Thanks for stopping by Margo.

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  3. Speaking of entranced, you would laugh if could see me sitting watching your slide show. I do it every time I visit.

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  4. Really, I mean how can you do this? I'm so impressed!

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  5. Excellent!! ....and so speedy! It takes me days to come up with something.

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  6. Concise piece, Teri. I love it.

    Pamela

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  7. Excellent Wordle with excellent photos as well !

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  8. Actually, I've sometimes felt this primal need to burn the map! (At first I thought you were lost and were never going to find your way, Teri!)

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  9. You've definitely nailed the wordle in concise fashion. Bravo!

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  10. Very good. Too bad you can't do the same to a GPS.

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  11. Very good write. Concise but, packs a punch inside it.

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  12. Spare, lean, and...devastating! The map going up in smoke. Aiee!

    A Whirl of Haiku

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  13. Maps, piff, who needs a map - just ask a guy! OK some gents do use maps, and even a few ask for directions. Wonderful Teri! Now I have to map out my off day...piff!

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  14. Nice job with the wordle words!! I like spare poems like this. So many possibilities for meaning! Thanks too for visiting my blog! I enjoy your photos as well.

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  15. found you via Inger's VBA! love your words and also your observations on HOW you wrote the words - fascinating!

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  16. Well thanks for all the comments. Going to just have to send out a group THANKS! I am currently away-with a sketchy internet connection...

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