Tuesday, November 08, 2011

dreaming of release

Use Edward Hopper’s Cape Cod painting as the prompt for writing today.
Dreaming of Release  by  Teri H Hoover
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The breath of winter
within the dying grass of autumn
that surrounds my sisters house.

Layers of loss
echo behind the clapboard walls.
A sadness heard from far away.
Like a scars upon her heart, she holds them to herself.

 Edward Hopper- Cape Cod



15 comments:

  1. Oh, yes, indeed. The poem is lovely and reaches me on an emotional level. I love the way you moved from the land to the house to the person. And then the way the first stanza is a metaphor for the second, as well as being literal. How gorgeous this is, Teri. You should feel pleased with yourself!

    margo

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  2. Beautiful and emotional. I like the way the two verse complement each other. Great poem.

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  3. Words shine when they come from so deep inside. Beautiful.

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  4. I recognize the melancholy and grief you describe - "the sadness heard from far away." This is a telling poem, Teri - it evokes strong feelings of connection as well as wanting to offer comfort - though a deeply personal grief can't really be shared.

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  5. I wondered how you managed this prompt so quickly - and then I read the poem and I understood. Good job. You pulled from yourself and that is so powerful.

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  6. I was going to choose a favorite line...I cannot. Really love the whole poem!

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  7. Margo -You see better than I wrote. Thank you for your observation.

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  8. Mike- Thank you for your nice comment. And yes the words seem to have been waiting.

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  9. Barb- The recognition of simmering sadness in the life of another-it does make me wish that I could share the burden. Thanks for the insightful comment.

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  10. Annette- You are exactly right. I looked at the painting and I was off. I appreciate your words.

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  11. Janet- Thank you for your comment. I too feel strongly about this poem. Like you I cannot find one line to make my favorite. Instead I am relieved somehow to have this poem written.

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  12. The quality of this poem shines out - and your strong feelings are what produced that quality. We can 'manufacture' a scenario from a prompt, but the result is never as good as one which comes naturally.

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  13. Thank you for sharing that toching poem.I love it. I also love paintings of Edward Hopper. My wall calender in 2008 was a collection of his painting.
    RedRose

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  14. Yes, I could see that in the picture too, Teri....the woman holds a LOT inside her. So much is unsaid. (Visiting you from Margo Roby's site.)

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